Visualizing just the right details
I admire writers who find just-right details to set a scene in time with perfect efficiency, to convey an emotion with power. Details that take me into the story without being heavy handed.
It could be a man wearing a gray felt fedora, a woman wearing a whale-boned corset, a cell phone the size of a shoebox. My host Rachelle picked such a detail for Michal’s Window when the protagonist used a brass surface as her mirror. A time before silvered mirrors! I knew at once this story was set a very long time ago.
Because I admire other writers who do it well, I’ve been honored when readers comment on the richness of the detail in my memoir Growing Up Country: Memories of an Iowa Farm Girl. The smell of fresh-baked bread or new-mown hay. A hankie washed out in the sink and plastered to the window screen to dry over night. The sharp points of hay stubble under a child’s bare feet.
I learned to use a form of guided visualization to pull out details for my memoir and I’ve continued to do a similar exercise for the novel I’m writing now.
The workshop leader who introduced me to the exercise had us close our eyes and think about the person we were writing about. She had us mentally open a door and walk in on that person. Then she slowly and quietly asked questions:
· What room is he in?
· What is she doing?
· Is he standing or sitting?
· What is she wearing?
· What color is it? What kind of fabric?
· Is he holding anything?
· When she looks at you, what emotion do you see in her face?
· Do you want to come close? Or stay away?
· What do you smell?
The questions went on. Even questions that didn’t at first evoke an image led me to new or unexpected realizations.
By the end of the exercise, I remembered the person, the good, the bad, the funny, the serious. I remembered in detail. Then I put those details into my writing.
Throughout the writing of my memoir, I often found myself with my hands poised over the keyboard, my eyes closed, my mind drifting in memory to a person or event from my childhood. I discovered that guided visualization worked as well for developing places and fleshing out emotions as it did for bringing people to life.
All those details brought my childhood to life on the pages of my memoir. And readers say they were right there with me, connecting with those experiences.
Now as I work on my first novel, historical fiction set during World War I, I find myself returning to the visualization technique. I can’t write a scene that takes place in a Victorian parlor without seeing in my mind what kind of furniture there is and how it’s placed, what hangs on the walls, without knowing what the people are wearing, what they might do for entertainment, what restrictions they suffered or freedoms they enjoyed.
Of course, visualization doesn’t work quite the same way for a novel set in 1914 as it did for my memoir. The novel is new territory. So other techniques – research – also come into play. I draw floor plans, interview experts, create timelines, scour the Internet. All the while, I’m building a storehouse to draw from as I write.
I find myself gathering far more information than I’ll eventually need and no doubt many of details will fall to the editing pen. But I’m immersed in a process that I hope will uncover just the right details to make my readers feel as though they’re right there, living the story along with my characters.
Have you ever come across a detail in a story that struck you as perfect for capturing a place in time or for conveying an emotion? Or one that struck you as entirely inappropriate? Please share!
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Carol Bodensteiner – Bio
Carol Bodensteiner is a writer who finds inspiration in the places, people, culture and history of the Midwest. After a successful career in public relations consulting, she turned to creative writing. She writes regularly for The Iowan magazine www.iowan.com blogs about writing, her prairie, gardening, and whatever in life interests her at the moment at www.carolbodensteiner.com She published her memoir GROWING UP COUNTRY in 2008 as a paperback and as an ebook in 2011.